Monday, September 10, 2007

8 . My dream vacation


My Dream Vacation

For my dream vacation, I want something special and unique. So I want to go to Africa for my dream vacation. It is an attractive place for me because I like animal so much no matter they are carnivorous or herbivorous animal. I usually watch National Geographic and Discovery channel in my free time so I learned some information about them. I want to go there to see whether it is the true or not as TV reported. For me, Africa is a most mysterious place and it is a developing country and there still keeping more nature environment than other countries.


source:

http://images.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://www.aave.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2007/01/africa%2520blog%25202.jpg&imgrefurl=http://www.aave.com/blog/category/africa/&h=606&w=449&sz=193&hl=zh-TW&start=207&tbnid=JcXJf1Ah-N1HRM:&tbnh=136&tbnw=101&prev=/images%3Fq%3DAfrica%26start%3D198%26gbv%3D2%26ndsp%3D18%26svnum%3D10%26hl%3Dzh-TW%26client%3Dfirefox-a%26channel%3Ds%26rls%3Dcom.google:zh-TW:official%26sa%3DN


2 comments:

Jimmy said...

This paragraph is well written and I can see that you did some research. The topic sentence is very good.

Corrections:
mystery---mysterious
compound sentences--- , so

Hui Ying Yang said...

I like this journal,it is very directly and make me feel interested.Maybe you can tell me more about what you will do in the Africa.